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Ficlet: had it coming

had it coming, Dean/Bela, 169 words, rated R

Much to my surprise, I have written a wee ficlet for Porn Battle XIV. I was inspired by the expectation that fics only be one comment long (although this is considerably shorter than that). It's for gryfndor_godess, of course.

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These are the hands of a thief on his skin; they trail down his belly like mist. They don’t poke or prod, though he might have expected it of her; he doubted whether their usual antagonism would get left at the door tonight, but her nails barely graze him.

These hands lift jewels from casings as smoothly as he chambers a round, and more lightly. They catch hold of him, but the grip is like satin, like foam. In her hand he’s all heat and flesh and unspent juices, but there’s nothing in her touch that’s going to help him spend them. She holds him like she’d hold some piece of fruit, delectable but easily bruised. She gloats over him like she would money. She teases him with one long silky stroke of her thumb, and he shudders, and her smile stretches wider.

There are far worse things done to a man than poke at his tender places, and she’s going to do every one of them to him.

Original entry posted at Dreamwidth. Feel free to reply here or there. (comment count unavailable DW replies)

Comments

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kalliel
Jan. 21st, 2013 07:53 am (UTC)
Belaaaaa. <3 I miss her. This remembers her well, and I love that last line.
snickfic
Jan. 21st, 2013 08:17 pm (UTC)
I'm glad you enjoyed! I have a friend who's a big fan of Bela, so I've been giving her more thought recently than I otherwise might.
cordelia_gray
Jan. 21st, 2013 09:01 am (UTC)
She holds him like she’d hold some piece of fruit, delectable but easily bruised.

Mmmm, lovely image. Dean/Bela is so hot, the world needs more of it :)
snickfic
Jan. 21st, 2013 04:00 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm sometimes a wee bit skeptical of this pairing, but I talked myself into it here. :)
gryfndor_godess
Jan. 21st, 2013 10:53 pm (UTC)
Snick + Bela/Dean:

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I LOVE THIS SO MUCH, THANK YOU. It's so in-character and so sexy, and I just want to hug my computer. No but actually: I woke up insanely early today (well, 5:45 AM) to go to the inauguration, and this was one of the first things I saw because I always check my email and LJ before getting out of bed, and it totally helped energize me into getting up at such an awful hour, and then I purposely kept the page open on my phone because I knew I wouldn't have 3G in DC with the crowds and wouldn't be able to get back to it, and then when I was bored during during the day, I got out my phone to re-read. And I was THIS CLOSE to sticking my phone in my BFFs' faces and going, "LOOK WHAT MY FRIEND WROTE FOR ME," and I totally would have (they're very understanding of my SPN obsession, so it would not have been as weird as it sounds) if it had been G-rated. *g*

he doubted whether their usual antagonism would get left at the door tonight, but her nails barely graze him.

These hands lift jewels from casings as smoothly as he chambers a round, and more lightly.

There are far worse things done to a man than poke at his tender places, and she’s going to do every one of them to him.

I think these three are my favorites? It's so haaarrrddd to choose, but I can't quote back the entire thing, so I think these are my ~official favorite lines.

snickfic
Jan. 24th, 2013 05:21 pm (UTC)
LOLOL your gif. I earned Queen, did I? :D

I am of course THRILLED that you liked it so well! I do feel a little bad that I wrote you something so short that your comment was longer than the fic. But it turns out the fic is also so short that it doesn't qualify for spnpairingbingo, which means I shall have to write more Dean/Bela later. I know you are heartbroken about this development.
gryfndor_godess
Jan. 26th, 2013 04:47 pm (UTC)
I know you are heartbroken about this development.

I'm crying tears of blood, TBH.

which means I shall have to write more Dean/Bela later.

You have no idea how much I wanted to say something along the lines of, "And you know that writing Dean/Bela so well means you should write more, right?" But I refrained, lest peer pressure make you less likely to want to write. *g* But WOOT, MORE DEAN/BELA. \O/
scarletscarlet
Jan. 23rd, 2013 06:36 am (UTC)
Yessss, Bela! And Dean/Bela, delicious. I love that last line so very much, but the whole thing draws an excellent picture.
snickfic
Jan. 24th, 2013 05:23 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. The friend for whom I wrote it is a big fan of the pairing, and she's been bringing me around to the idea. :)
scarletscarlet
Jan. 24th, 2013 05:30 pm (UTC)
A pleasing notion. :D
geckoholic
Jan. 25th, 2013 02:12 pm (UTC)
Seconding the love for this line: She holds him like she’d hold some piece of fruit, delectable but easily bruised.

Lovely work, I really like this. :)
snickfic
Jan. 26th, 2013 01:14 am (UTC)
Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
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